member of the A. Boone Unconditional Love Brigade ([info]rhoddlet) wrote,
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Inspired by a line from Marvolo's lovely Penmanship.

Can't remember if Tom's a prefect in the diary or not, but I'm pretending he is because the Lexicon doesn't say.

*

His fingers are long and skinny beyond even a pianist's, and when he lies in bed next to you and stretches his arm out next to yours, you can see just how much longer and paler they are than yours. Yours aren't bad, either, and you always try to keep them clean, but there's this unearthly translucence about Tom's fingertips that really quite escapes you.

Part of it is because he's a ghost, but you're also convinced that he must have been this clean, this tidy when he was a boy. He's so real now that it's hard to imagine that he just comes to visit you after the rest of Hogwarts falls asleep, but you can see him filling in night by night, the colors getting more vivid and his uniform jacket starting to move from the muscles in his back. He sits at the foot of your bed and looks at your course books, smiling at them because they're so simple, and you come down from the front of the bed and sit with him while he tells you interesting addendums and monographs that he's read about those topics and that they've left out of the books. Sometimes, he'll even do your rounds with you -- you get the shitty graveyard patrol since you're the lowest of the sixth year prefects, below even that Hufflepuff fifth year who's in because she has long legs and flirts with the Head Boy, and afterwards he'll come up to the Prefect's bathroom with you for a good long soak.

Tom's the most charming thing you've ever met, and the handsomest of the Hogwarts ghosts. The handsomest ghost you've ever seen, really, though you didn't realize he was one at first. "I don't think I saw you in the Prefect's compartment," you said to his back the first night you rounded the corner for the Prefect's meeting at eleven and saw him up ahead of you. You'd seen him at the Sorting Feast, moving among the Slytherins, then chivvying some Gryffinidors into place, including your little sister. Ginny said something to him, pointed you out to him, and you had locked eyes across the crowded room.

The handsomest boy you've ever seen at Hogwarts, in fact. Even better looking than Diggory or Wood, with that soft waving black hair. That face, so full of intelligence and wit, and the way he'd smiled back at you, raised his hand at you, then bent back down to catch what Ginny was saying to him. Penelope had tugged on your sleeve, jealous, and you'd turned back to her, still entranced by that bright smile -- "Is he one of the new Prefects?" you'd asked her. "I don't think I've noticed him before."

Later, you'd run to catch him. Called out in the hallway, and the ghost had turned around then, his hands in his pockets. When you drew closer, you realized that you could see the castle wall through his funny, old-fashioned school uniform. "You're not real," you'd said to him, mouth moving as you worked the idea in your head.

"Oh," he'd said, sticking his hands in his pockets and giving you a rueful little smile as a breeze down the corridor made his shoulders ripple. "No, I'm not. At least, not now. I haven't ridden in the Prefect's compartments for a very long time. I'm very sorry if you thought I was a prefect or if I was overstepping myself at the Sorting Ceremony -- I loved being a Prefect, you know, and I wanted to pretend."

"You're a ghost," you said. Your lips felt rather dead and heavy themselves; his lips moved so easily, so fluidly. Most ghosts, after all, show how they died. The Bloody Baron, Nearly Headless Nick, the exsanguinated Grey Lady. But this boy is complete. Flawless. There isn't a mark on his skin aside from the occaisional ink stain between his thighs, and you should know because you've undressed him and he's undressed you. Acres of smooth, taut skin that's faintly cool underneath your fingers, though he moans in pleasure when you take his shoulder underneath your mouth. You know it's dangerous to make love to a ghost because they might be after your vitality; even if they're not, every time you kiss one, they steal a little bit of your life away, but it's a price you're willing to pay for this ghost. Tom apologizes so fervently everytime afterwards, and even if that weren't so, each kiss you give to him means a kiss he gives you back.

And he feels realer and realer with every kiss that passes -- he's getting realer even when you don't kiss him. On Valentine's Day, after you left Penelope and were getting ready to make your rounds, he'd popped into your room, looking realer than he ever had, and he'd almost pushed you to the bed in his eagarness. "I've missed you too," you'd said, pulling the jacket off his shoulders while he backed you into the bed.

You could almost even feel the fabric underneath your hands, he was so real that night. You remember being surprised, actually, because the fabric of his clothes was so poor. After all, he was such a beautiful boy that you assumed that he would only have beautiful clothes; somebody with cheekbones and a mouth like his could only be from a rich, old Wizarding family, and the way magic hummed in his teeth and tongue. . .

The idea that he'll someday be able to fuck you makes you tremble. His kisses are so forceful. There's always the touch of teeth when he wraps his mouth around your cock, and the idea of him drawing your hips back onto his cock. . .

That night, he whispered. "Someday, I'll fuck you, Percy," he said, mouth on your shoulder before you spread his legs wide and pushed into him. His head drops back when you do that: he gasps and writhes when you slide into him. When you bury yourself all the way, his shoulders go back and his hips go up. He arches. Yowls like a cat, whimpers like you're killing him, but when you stop to make sure he's all right, he guides your hand to his cock.

His eyes glitter like stars in the darkness of your bed. "Someday, I'll fuck you, Weasley. I'll make you beg for me. I'll make you put your hands on this headboard and spread your legs and say, 'Tom, please fuck me. You make me feel so good.' I'll split you in half, Percy -- I'll make you scream my name, beg me to let you come. Someday, I'll do that to you. Someday soon."

There was that time in the Prefect's bathroom, the night after Penelope got turned to stone. It was also the first time you took him into the Prefect's baths -- you liked taking a bath there after finishing your rounds, but you'd always shooed him away out because you didn't want him to see you naked. How could you undress in front of something like that? He'd laugh at you without your prefect's badge on, but afterwards, you would go back out into the hallway, your hair wet and dripping down your neck because you were so eagar to see him again that you didn't have time to cast a drying charm, and he'd always be sitting on the windowsill opposite, waiting for you.

That night, you were too tired to chase him away, and he followed you in. The surface of his body billowed and snapped taut as the steam from the baths hit him. "Oh, Percy," he had breathed, bringing his hands up to his face. "I'd forgotten how good it feels in here. I have such wonderful memories of this place, you know."

You had been stripping your clothes off by the black marble tub then -- your back hurt. You'd fallen asleep on the ground by Penelope's cot in the Infirmary before Pomfrey found you, and even then, it'd taken her and Dumbledore and Tom, quietly waving at you from the corridor, to get you off the floor.

"You should've come into the Infirmary," you said, looking at yourself in the mirror. You looked awful. Circles under your eyes. Even paler than usual, and the back of your throat was distinctly scratchy. "I. . . I would have liked for you and Penelope to have met."

Tom had pulled off his shoes and socks and was dangling his feet in the hot water. You came around and sat down next to him and started unbuttoning your shirt. "Oh, I think we have, actually," Tom said. "But they've got some wards around the Infimrary, so I can't get in."

"Oh? Not even if somebody invites you in?" You undid the buttons at your right cuff, remembering only briefly to be embarssed because you didn't have cufflinks to wear in them, and Tom always had such a beautiful pair. Slytherin green with silver edging and a pair of snakes wrapped around each other; they'd been a gift from his house-head, he explained. An award he got for special services or something.

You were fumbling with the buttons for your left cuff, then. Your right hand was even less inclined to cooperate than usual, and you were just on the verge of giving up, half in tears, when Tom had bent over, his lips grazing your wrist.

"No, I can't get in even then, but let me get that for you," Tom had said. He undid the buttons with his lips, and when that was done, he moved to your throat and finally your mouth.

"You're so cold," you said when he he started to undo the buttons of your trousers. "Your fingers are. . . How can you be so cold when it's so hot in here?" There was steam in the air, and a gloss of sweat on his forehead.

"Oh," Tom had said, pushing you back onto the tiles and running his mouth up your thigh. "I'll warm up."

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[info]elynrae

August 18 2002, 10:21:57 UTC 9 years ago

You know it's dangerous to make love to a ghost because they might be after your vitality; even if they're not, every time you kiss one, they steal a little bit of your life away, but it's a price you're willing to pay for this ghost is wonderful, and so is the last line - it's menacing and innocent at the same time. I can't decide if Tom loves Percy (has learnt to love him maybe?) or is just using him. I'm awed. Again. /fangirl.

[info]andrush

August 18 2002, 10:39:25 UTC 9 years ago

Oh. My. God.
Ok... that was probably one of the most erotic, beautiful, and evil things I've ever read. The whole idea of... incubus comes to mind... speechless... my god.
Yes, I definitely want to see Tom split Percy in half. He's begging for it, isn't he?
Such an innocent, yet wanton little whore.
Oh, Percy. You bad boy.

Reading this... like everything else I've read by you, makes me wonder how you can even attempt to put up with my shotty writing style of RP. My god. Lucky. I suppose that's what I am.

[info]xandria

August 18 2002, 10:42:56 UTC 9 years ago

Wickedly delicious! And trouser buttons -- YEAH!!!! I know, I'm such a schmuck.

I cannot cite a favourite line because there are too many in this ficlet of yours. Probably this one though:

There isn't a mark on his skin aside from the occaisional ink stain between his thighs, and you should know because you've undressed him and he's undressed you.

While many of your ficlets are perfect as they are, leaving me shivering and whole, I found the ending left me a smidge wanting. I wanted just a little bit more along this vein. Just a little more of this Tom and Percy.

Can I beg?

Xan

[info]silviakundera

August 18 2002, 10:44:34 UTC 9 years ago

... er. yes.

I don't even have words to express here how much I loved this. Going to email!

[wisks away]

[info]ravenchel

August 18 2002, 12:53:28 UTC 9 years ago

There isn't a mark on his skin aside from the occaisional ink stain between his thighs

This...this is .....*goes incoherent*

This is about the fifth time I've read this today, and I am utterly amazed by it each time. Tom and Percy...so fucking perfect.

I am your fangirl forever!

[info]spacebrat

August 18 2002, 15:07:28 UTC 9 years ago

The idea that he'll someday be able to fuck you makes you tremble. His kisses are so forceful. There's always the touch of teeth when he wraps his mouth around your cock, and the idea of him drawing your hips back onto his cock. . .

I adore and worship you, you know. As I should because this is fabulous. *blows you a kiss* Wonderfulwonderfulwonderful.

[info]ethrosdemon

August 18 2002, 19:48:47 UTC 9 years ago

bitch!

I am so green from envy over this fic!

The concept itself is brill. Of course Tom was getting up to no good when Ginny was doing something else! Just too clever an idea to not be mineminemine. *g*

Then there is your usual, superior writing abilities. *sniff* I want to eat you up and steal your talent.

I think the cufflinks were my favorite detail here.

[info]rhoddlet

August 19 2002, 10:02:57 UTC 9 years ago

Re: bitch!

I <3 cufflinks. They're so little and tiny and expensive and telling -- totally frivolous, really, but there for sartorial splendor. *purrs at Tom*

[info]angela8675

August 18 2002, 20:05:04 UTC 9 years ago

God damn! [info]ethrosdemon senrt me over here to gawk at your fic, and this was incredible. Just haunting and slightly subversive. Sigh. Also green with envy... Now I have to run off to your site and read the Waterworld series.

[info]cyclogenesis

August 19 2002, 01:48:31 UTC 9 years ago

Oh, that was luscious. Just beautiful. I loved it.

[info]sqeakyclean

August 19 2002, 02:22:38 UTC 9 years ago

The return of canon!rhoddlet. Welcome back. =)

Your writing is beautiful, as it always is. It just flows, each section connecting in some way even if not linearly. The little details you love to research and write in really do enrich the setting of the ficlet.

I've always liked the way you characterise Tom Riddle. We all know he's evil, but so often people don't concentrate on the surface charm he must have exuded, because he obviously won the trust of practically everyone as a student. Your Tom is so charming, and along with his looks it would be easy to see how Percy could fall in love with him, ghost or not. At first I thought Tom was too apologetic too nice, but this bit - "Someday, I'll fuck you, Weasley...I'll make you scream my name, beg me to let you come. Someday, I'll do that to you. Someday soon." - is so explicit and out of place that it shows how well Tom is hiding what he is in order to gain Percy's trust, to live.

One thing: it feels unfinished to me, as a stand alone ficlet. But I don't know if that's your intention, or if I'm just reading it wrongly. =)

[info]rhoddlet

August 19 2002, 10:09:57 UTC 9 years ago

*dies* As canonRhod as ever can be, considering that Tom and Percy never met in the books. Hah.

Or they did, and I'm just revealing my usual ignorance.

But I'm glad you enjoyed it, SQ. You know how much I value your opinion, and I am so very happy that you find my Tom plausible because Christian Coulson is just too handsome to play a crude Tom. As to the unfinished quality of this ficlet -- are you referring to the ending, which is rather ambigious? You and Xan have both commented on it, and I'm chewing on the idea.

Honestly, I think it probably comes from the fact that it doesn't move very strongly to a single conclusion. My brain just got to the idea of Tom giving Percy a blowjob, and it just fucking shorted, but . . . . *chewing lip, though lip DOES NOT EQUAL idea*

[info]xandria

August 19 2002, 13:01:22 UTC 9 years ago

I don't think it's so much a description of the blowjob that's wanted as just perhaps another verbal or mental exchange. Another exorcise of Tom's subtle power? Does that make sense?

I'm really not trying to pick it apart. It's beautiful and wonderful and amazing. But just left me a skidge hungry, which your fics don't usually do.

Don't hate me.

Xan, Rhod infected

[info]sqeakyclean

August 19 2002, 23:18:21 UTC 9 years ago

Heheh. Yes, you're right. They don't meet in the books. I have fallen into the fandom trap, into blending fanon that I can believe in into canon. I like the fanon idea that Ginny caught Percy and Penny in compromising situations because she was dogging him, trying to get him to look at the diary for her because he's the most intellectual and responsible of her brothers, and thus the right person to go to. And because of the good stories written along this line, I can be convinced into thinking that Percy wrote to Tom, and Tom came to him. Brilliant writers like you and Trin and Zarya fill in the gaps from there.

Yes I am referring to the ending, and its ambiguity. You've set up this idea that Tom is somehow becoming more and more real, and possibly he's taking it from Percy every time they touch, and...oh. I think I just solved it for myself. I am a doofus sometimes. Hee. No, the ending's fine now. Ah, I think I needed to look at it with a more sinister mindset.

I really need to think more before I write these mini-essays, and scare perfectly good authors. *sigh*

[info]altricial

August 19 2002, 05:07:01 UTC 9 years ago

This is bloody fucking awesome.

[info]rhoddlet

August 19 2002, 12:09:55 UTC 9 years ago

No, your new three little pigs LJicon is bloody fucking awesome although I don't have a clue what it means. Still cute as all get out, though.

[info]ztrin

August 19 2002, 07:38:27 UTC 9 years ago

"Oh," Tom had said, pushing you back onto the tiles and running his mouth up your thigh. "I'll warm up."

That line makes my knees quiver. I would be more coherent but that line is running around in my head and seducing all the coherence out of my brain.
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